It did make sense to me, but I'm not sure it would have if someone didn't know your sims. Not sure how you could do that unless there were a way to make her look even more tan, though.
Yes, poor Lizzie. I was going for Jane being dissapointed in Lizzie, but I don't think it came across that way. I had thought of a sunburn instead of tan, but tan fit better with what I wrote in the last chapter.
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on 2010-09-16 06:23 am (UTC)It did make sense to me, but I'm not sure it would have if someone didn't know your sims. Not sure how you could do that unless there were a way to make her look even more tan, though.
Still, great for a first time person!
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on 2010-09-16 02:51 pm (UTC)Thanks!